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中考备考解析——写作
发布时间:2010-06-07 作者: 来源于:昂立外语网站

中考写作评分标准

总计18分,其中内容7分,语言8分,组织结构(总体印象分)3

 

内容部分:

7分,内容切题,意思连贯,表达清楚,完整。

56分,内容基本切题,意思大致连贯,表达基本清楚,但不够完整。

34 内容不够切题,意思不够连贯,表达不够清楚,离题目要求较远。

02 文不对题,表达不清。

 

语言部分:

学生需用语规范,表达准确,无或少见语法错误,词汇拼写正确,句型使用恰当

语法和词汇差错每一个错扣0.5-1分,同一差错不重复扣分。标点符号,大小写出错,酌情扣0.51分。

 

组织结构方面:

1. 内容充实,不写废话,上下文连贯,用语规范,表达正确,无或者少见语法错误;词汇和句型句式运用恰当,多见好句型和习惯表达用语者,可给组织结构分。

2. 一般情况下,内容和语言积累得分在14分以上者,方可得到组织结构分。

3. 通篇句型,句式单一。 词汇贫乏者,即使无语法错误,一般也不给组织结构分。

相关数据:2008年,组织结构分为2分,全市抽样平均得分0.2113分,得分率10.56%

          2009年,组织结构分为3分,全市抽样平均得分0.9分,得分率30%

 

 

 

 

近三年中考写作真题

 

2007

Things I hate to do

必须包含三个提示要点

2008

Love around me

必须包含三个提示要点

2009

I Want to Do Something for my School

三个提示要点仅供参考

 

 

Case study:

Things I hate to do(2007年总分16)

Necessary points:
What are the things you have to do?

What do you hate doing most? Why ?(Give at least two reasons.)

 

Answer 1:

I hate to get up early and I hate to listen to the noisy music, but I hate eating vegetables most. Although vegetables are healthy to my body, they really smell bad. And I don’t like the food which is green. More importantly ,my mother always likes to cook vegetables, but they taste terribly bad. So God, please let the vegetables disappear. I hate to eat them really.

7+7+2=16(full score)

 

 

Answer 2:

There are many things I hate to do, such as: reading boring books, go to bed early and so on.

 

I hate to read boring books because I think it spend me much time, so I don’t like to read them. I hate to go to bed early because I want to watch more TV, I want play more computer games.

 

But I hate most to have lessons on the weekends. Because the lessons are not interesting and they make me tired. I wish I couldn’t have lessons at weekends.

 

5+4.5+0=9.5

只罗列了一个理由,语法问题众多

 

Love around me (2008总分16)

Necessary points:

Is there any love around me? (Give one or two examples)

How do you feel when you get love from him, her, or them?

What are you going to do to show your love?

 

Answer 1:

There is a lot of love around me . For example , my mother cooks food for me every day and always looks after me carefully when I feel sick. In addition, If I am in trouble at school, my friends and teachers often help me to deal with it. Every time, I feel happy and moved by them. I think I am the luckiest person in the world. So I want to give love to them in return. I’m going to do more housework and study hard. I’m going to help my friends as well when they have any question. In all, love is all around us.

I want to do something for my school(2009年总分18)

Suggested points:
what do you want to do for your school?

Why do you want to do it ?

How are you going to do it ?

 

How time flies! I have been a student in my school for 4 years. In return, I want to buy much manymore new books and magazines for my school. As we all know, books can enrich our knowledge. It’s very important for us to read books. But there are only a little(a few) books in our school library. So I am going to buy more books for our school. What’s more, I will share my own books with others. I think our school library will become more and more helpful.

7+7.5+3=17.5(个别语句出错)

 

 

考前提醒:

1Think before you write

(2009) Soon I will leave my school. I want to buy a lot of flowers for my school. I am very thankful to my teachers. They always help me when I in trouble . I love my teachers. I love my school. I will give flowers to my teachers. I will put these flowers in our school in order to make our school more beautiful. (条理不清,思路混乱)

 

Eg: My most unforgettable moment

   Suggested outlines:

   When and where did this thing happen?

   Why was it unforgettable for you?

2008 Olympic took place in Beijing, I didn’t go to Beijing . I felt sad. If I went there, I was happy. So I went to the restaurant  to eat delicious food , I watched TV on Nanjing Road. Then I telephoned my friend to come out to play with me. My friends all came. They laughed and played with me. We were all happy. We had a good time.(流水账)

 

 

I waited for a long time for the unforgettable moment. It was coming soon. “Five, Four, Three, two,” As soon as I was counting “one ”, the second hand struck eight o’clock. Twenty-nine “feet” were going to every corner of the world at once: The twenty-ninth Olympic Games started in Beijing. Chinese people waited for a century to hold Olympic Games. Now, it was becoming true.  All the people and I could not forget this special moment. On the eighth of August, 2008, the Chinese people…..

 

 

2.写作文时,务必注意

1)语法(单复数,第三人称后加S,动词时态,语态)

I’m a citizen of Shanghai. Shanghai  is a international city and it will hold the 2010 World Expo so that I can see many changes take place in Shanghai. For example, many building is building now. Also the citizens of Shanghai become friendly and kinder to others. A few months ago, I often see people who were sleeping cloth walking on the street. Bur for the time being, I can’t see these thing any longer.  I feel very happy about the changes around me. With these good changes, we can say aloud confidently: We have got ready for the 2010 World Expo.

 

2)避免中式英语

我想让学校变得比现在更好

I want let my school will be better than now?

 

(2009 I Want to Do Something for my School)

(bad example)

I will leave school. So I think I must do something for my school. Because it learn me more and more knowledge. Although I can’t do big thing for my school, I can keep school clean when I live school. I can’t think I can keep school very clean. But, when I see rubbish, I will take it into the rubbish bin. When I leave school , I will remember school. Because I am a member of school

 

(good example)

I want to make my school more beautiful in the future. The school gave me the sweetest time in my life . It enabled me to study in a warm and charming environment. I’ve learned a lot of knowledge here. Therefore, I’d love to do something for it in return. For example, I’ll keep the classroom tidy when I go back to school. I also want to donate some money for it when I have a job. In one word, I’ll try my best to make my school nice.

 

 

3)以语言正确为前提

多用好句型,丰富连接词

表示并列:

表示转折:

表示递进:

表示让步: though, now that, even if

表示因果:

表示条件: if , unless

表示并列: on one hand, on the other hand, in the same way

表示解释:

表示举例:

表示归纳: in short, in a word

表示观点:I think, in my opinion, I’m sure, what I think is that ….. I am afraid , It’s common knowledge

 

 

案例:School uniform

School uniform rule has its advantages. First of all, we don’t have to spend time thinking about what to wear every day. In addition, we don’t need to worry about competing with others based on how we look. However, it has some disadvantages. Our individuality can’t be shown if we wear the same clothes every day……What’s more , sometimes the uniform style is old-fashioned.

 

学会同义替换

Like=be fond of=enjoy

Be glad/happy/be pleased with/be satisfied with

 

句式多样

案例:Things I hate to do

There are so many things I hate to do, such as doing my housework, waiting for a long time, talking with a boring friend, getting up too early, etc. But the most thing I hate to do is to help do the housework. I think it’s just a waste of time. The housework is always dirty, difficult and boring. And if I spend too much time on housework, I don’t have time for fun. But a saying changed my mind, “There are certain things we hate to do, we must do. That is responsibility.” In order to be responsible for the family, I must do the things I hate to do: to do the housework.

 

 

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