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篇幅较多，分批上哈~ 以下是第35课 “伸张正义”篇，第33课“连锁反应”篇请移步至：http://blog.onlycollege.com.cn/78345/viewspace-24935

※  L35 P164 write an imaginary account of the thief’s experiences up to the time he was freed by fire fighters

By Zhang Yuxiang

The fire fighter arrived in time and saved the thief. He was very thankful to the firemen and the shop assistant. He admitted that he had tried to enter the shop to steal something, but he was stuck in the chimney and got nothing. He told anything (招供一切不如用everything) to the police and was taken into the car. On the way to the police station, the thief thought that he was too unlucky last night.

On the other hand, he thought that he was so lucky because he was saved by the firemen instead of death. 

短文描述了被解救后thief的表现和内心活动。最后不妨再写几笔有关thief以后的打算（如是否继续行窃或者吃一堑长一智以后进入店内的通道选择…）大部分句子开头都是人作主语，可以尝试多用些分词结构，让句子变得立体而有层次哦！

By Fang Jiahao

Ask For Trouble

The large jewellery store had been my target for nearly a week. I kept close watch on the shop but there’s no good chance for me to take action. But then I noticed the chimneys. I found that the store was an old converted house with those tall chimneys. (学以致用old converted很好! 以后多用就可以变成自己的词汇了~) I couldn’t help hiding my excitement (想表达的意思是“掩藏不住自己的兴奋之情”，用cannot help doing 意思就是情不自禁地掩饰啦，推荐用: can hardly conceal my excitement) and at that night, I climbed on to the roof. Moonlight was bright, I saw that the chimney seemed wide enough to let me in. (能想到环境描写作为衬托，但前后两句需要连接起来，不妨用分词或介词短语，如under the bright moonlight) I went down slowly with my tools and my bag. It is wide at the top of the chimney, but I got stuck at (in) the middle of it. I had no choice but to climbed up again. (别无选择只能做，have no choice/alternative but to do sth.) Believe that good luck will come, (这里要用现在分词哦，believing that good luck will accompany me, 这样是不是更形象呢) I went down another chimney. This one seemed wider than the first one—this was what I am thinking when I got stuck in that chimney again. I tried to get back, but then I realized I could neither climb up nor down. Fear attacked me. (心里满是恐惧，很贴切~！) I shouted for help but no one could hear me in this cold night. Everything was dark and silent. I even thought I would die in that dawn (dawn 在这里神马意思？) chimney! Next morning, I heard the voice of shop assistants—HOPE! I shouted as loudly as I can. Thanks the God, finally, firefighters came and freed me.

整篇文章以第一人称来刻画“我”是如何行窃的。让读者有深刻剖析thief内心的感觉，身临其境。除了写我的行窃思路和行动外，还不忘用环境来点缀一番。使文章完整，紧凑，流畅。再加上ask for trouble贴切的标题，堪称课文前传~ 有使用长句，分词结构的想法，但要用对哈~总体不错！继续努力！

By Gao Shuyi

When a thief was walking pass (pass不能做介词，只有past可以哦) a large jewellery store, he had the idea that he could break into the store and steal a huge number of jewelleriesy diamonds and pearls which are worth tens of thousands of pounds. (值多少钱不要漏掉be动词，或者不用定语从句，直接pearls worth …也可) He had been planning the theft for a long time and he kept close watch on shop day by day. (时态用得好)

One day, he was staring at the shop when he suddenly noticed that the store has many large fireplaces and tall chimneys. Then he had a plan. One night, at about two o'clock, there were no people on the street and the store was quiet, he climbed on to the roof and tiptoed to one of the chimneys. The chimney was wide enough so he slowly went down, but he got stuck. However, he managed to climb up again. He didn't lose hope and he tried a second time. He went down another chimney carefully. Unfortunately, he got stuck again. He tried to move but this time he was firmly stuck. He was like a mouse in a trap. (比喻生动形象) He could neither climb up nor down. Feeling frightened, he cried for help, but everything was dark and quiet. He was terrified and he shouted the next morning. Luckily, the muffled cry was heard by a shop assistant. The girl ran to tell the manager who rang up the fire brigade. With great difficulties, he was eventually freed by the fire fighters.

整个故事能流畅地描写出来，通过一系列动词将thief的偷窃刻画得十分具体，逼真，如tiptoe, got stuck, lose hope, try a second time等。句子之间的联系可以再用一些连接词强调一下，让文章变得更为紧凑。