第一次作文大家都很认真哦！不管是续写还是银行抢劫都写出了自己的特色和亮点。
下面我们一起来欣赏、学习、分享童鞋们的作品吧~ 希望对你们有帮助！^_^
L6 作文之银行抢劫篇请挪步至：
By Zhao Pingyi
They got away
The thieves’ car with thousands of pounds worth of diamonds (和课文有衔接) joined the traffic. Mr. Taylor immediately took a taxi and followed closely their car.
There is no doubt that it was a mad chase through the streets. Just then, the thieves’ car hit another car. However, it went straight instead of stopping. A moment later, the police chased both taxi and thieves. Mr. Taylor’s taxi stopped at traffic lights, while the thieves still went away. The poor taxi driver was stopped by the police because he had been speeding. Mr. Taylor explained the situation to the police and asked for help.
With the help of the police, the thieves’ car was found ten minutes later. It was on the side street. Unfortunately, it was only a car——without thieves or diamonds. In fact, the thieves abandoned the car and escaped on foot with the diamonds!
续写给出的提示词都能恰当使用。从introduction, 到development再到最后的conclusion，结构完整。希望句式多变化，让文章更有层次感~
By Zhang Yifan/ Andrew
Seeing the thieves’ car joineding the traffic,(分词结构用得好) Mr. Taylor took a taxi and followed them. Urging the driver to be faster, Mr. Taylor anxiously stared at the thieves’ car. At first, the taxi driver refused to speed up, but when Mr. Taylor told him what had happened, he drove at full speed. A mad chase began through the streets. (非人称名词作主语，又形象！) A few minutes later, the thieves’ car hit another car. The collision was so violently that the thieves’ car turned in a circle and badly damaged, but it did not stop. For Since/As both taxi and the thieves’ car were speeding, the police chased them with the sirens wailing. (for 表原因不放句首，Since/As可以引导原因状语从句) Mr. Taylor’s taxi stopped at traffic lights, running out of petrol. Though two men inside were very angry, swearing and stomping (押头韵，动作描述准确), it was no use. (长短句结合)The thieves had got away. Afterwards, the police caught up with the taxi whose driver was charged with speeding, for he had been speeding through almost the whole city. They refused to let him off, even though Mr. Taylor explained the situation. At last, the thieves' car was found ten minutes later on a side street, but the thieves escaped on foot.
第六课的续写和原文有得一拼。Andrew很擅长用非谓语结构，比如分词。这样可以把中文中并列的多个动词分出主次层次。句子结构也丰富不少。另一个值得学习的地方是小词的运用，包括副词，动词短语搭配，以及连接句子的逻辑词等，都能体现作者的英语功底的，不错！
By Li Yang
They got away. Their car joined the traffic. Mr. Taylor was very angry and anxious. So he took a taxi to followed the thieves’ car. They chase through the street. As we all know, it is dangerous to chase each other in the street. Because of the thieves drove too fast, they hit another car. (Because放句首一般用来回答Why提问，可用Since/As) But they did not stop, they continued driving. At this time, the police saw the whole process of accident. He chased both taxi and the car which the thieves and Mr. Taylor were in. The taxi stopped at the traffic lights, but the thieves got away! Not only did the taxi stopped, but also the police stopped too.(also和too语义重复) Mr. Taylor explained the situation to the police. Ten minutes later, the thieves’ car was found in the side street. They abandoned the car and escaped on foot.
课文续写结构完整，提示词也能串联地比较恰当。可以提高的地方是句与句之间的连接，以及长句使用，可以尝试用一些非谓语结构。
By Huo Mengjie
They got away. But the thieves’ car joined the traffic. Mr. Taylor was very angry and hurry. hurried So Mr. Taylor took a taxi. They followed the thieves’ car. A mad chase through the streets, (这句话不完整) and the thieves’ car hit another car, but the thieves’s car did not stop. As soon as the police chased both taxi and thieves. Mr. Taylor’s taxi stopped at traffic lights. So he let the thieves got away. The taxi driver was stopped by the police, because he had been speeding. They Mr. Taylor explained the situation. Finally, the thieves’ car was found ten minutes later. It was stopped on side street. The car was abandoned by two thieves. To he surprised, the thieves escaped on foot.
后续发展从头到尾比较完整。要避免小的语法错误，连接词，时间状语如as soon as等要学会运用。不熟悉的句型可以再翻翻看新三书哦~
