2015长宁区中考英语二模作文范文

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94.Write a passage of at least 60 words about the topic “A Good Habit of Mine” (请以“我的一个好习惯”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格)

Use the following as necessary points:

1. What’s your good habit? (Describe it with an example)

2. Why do you think it is good?

3. How will you keep it in your future life?

Ø 昂立中考名师陆婧老师样文：

Plans are indispensable necessities① in our daily life, ②which means you won’t lead a successful life if the life you are leading is without them. ③ I am always proud to own a habit of making To-Do-Lists everyday. ④Judged from personal experiences, this habit did⑤ help me to become a better planned person. Take our trip last time as an example: ⑥Having spent a whole week making the list of what I should buy and bring before packing my language, I completed the packing in just 2 hours with 50 minutes in Carrefour included. I can always save a large amount of time in this way. ⑦All I need to do is to simply note down these Must-to-tasks occurring to me.

Then I can check it later in the day. Nowadays, with the development of technology, ⑧seldom do people usepaper and pens any more. They are not easy to carry at all. This situation goes the same with⑨ me.

However, I am so surprised to find out ⑩that there are plenty of “to-do-list” apps in Apple Store now and many of them are of perfect designs! So without any doubt and any difficulty, I will definitely keep this habit of mine. (204字)

Ø 内容分析：

长宁区的这篇作文为全命题作文，文章内容有明确规定，注意看清楚提示语“Use the following as necessary points”所以一定要按照要求将下面的三点全部写进文章当中，注意文章内容长度的比例分配。

Ø 精彩亮点分析：

亮点一：indispensable necessities 不可或缺的重要组成部分。

亮点二：开篇一句非限定性定语从句强调计划的重要性。

亮点三：开篇一句大的定语从句套了一句条件状语从句，状语从句里面又套了一一句小定从。

亮点四：过去分词做条件状语。

亮点五：使用强调句式，一个did更加强了语气。

亮点六：现在分词做时间状语，因为后面主句用的是过去式completed 所以从句用having done结构，强调在此之前。

亮点七：简单的主系表结构，主语用了定语从句，表语用了现在分词做后置定语。

亮点八：否定词前置，采用倒装结构。

亮点九：go the same with sb. 某人的情况也是一样的。